Shel — that’s a lot to review (so I won’t). You could try applying some “rules” about headlines: shorter is better; don’t ask questions; sell the sizzle, not the sausage. Greg :-)= ______________________ Greg Caulton Creative Director, Patent Draftsman www.gregcaulton.com 233 West Pelham Road Shutesbury, MA 01072 Phone: 413-461-7096 > On Jul 25, 2019, at 8:00 AM, Shel Horowitz via Hidden-discuss <hidden-discuss at lists.hidden-tech.net> wrote: > > Looking for feedback on the new lead headline for my main website. The body text will be different depending on which headline I run with. Please tell me why you chose the one you did. Additional suggestions or "I hate this one" also welcome. > > How Can You Help the World and Still Have a Profitable Business? > How Can Your Business Make a Difference on the Things that REALLY Matter—And Thrive Financially—At the Same Time? > Can Your Social and Environmental Commitments Help Your Business Thrive? > Can Being a Hero to the Planet and Its People Make Your Business More Profitable? > “How Can I Make a Difference in the World AND A Good Profit?” > How You Can Help the World and Still Have a Profitable Business > How Can You Help the World While Building a Profitable Business > How Can You Help the World While Building a Thriving Business > How Your Business Can Thrive as it Makes a Difference in the World > How Can Your Business Thrive as it Makes a Difference in the World? > How to Turn Your Social and Environmental Values into Profits > “How Can I Turn My Social and Environmental Values into Profits?” > Social Entrepreneurship: The Surprising Secret of So Many Profitable Businesses > Social Entrepreneurship: A Surprising Secret of Business Success > Social Justice, Planetary Healing—and PROFIT: Three Legs of Business Success > Are You a SECRET Social Entrepreneur? > Why are you Keeping Your Social Entrepreneurship a Secret? > Change the World AND Create a Thriving Business! > Change the World AND Make Good Profit! > > Shel Horowitz - "The Transformpreneur"(sm) > ________________________________________________ > Watch (and please share) my TEDx Talk, > "Impossible is a Dare: Business for a Better World" > http://www.ted.com/tedx/events/11809 <http://www.ted.com/tedx/events/11809> <http://www.ted.com/tedx/events/11809> > (move your mouse to "event videos") > > Contact me to bake in profitability while addressing hunger, > poverty, war, and catastrophic climate change > > Twitter: @shelhorowitz > > * First business ever to be Green America Gold Certified > * Inducted into the National Environmental Hall of Fame > > http://goingbeyondsustainability.com <http://goingbeyondsustainability.com/> > mailto:shel at greenandprofitable.com <mailto:shel at greenandprofitable.com> * 413-586-2388 <tel:413-586-2388> > Award-winning, best-selling author of 10 books. Latest: > Guerrilla Marketing to Heal the World (co-authored with Jay Conrad Levinson) > > _________________________________________________ > _______________________________________________ > Hidden-discuss mailing list - home page: http://www.hidden-tech.net > Hidden-discuss at lists.hidden-tech.net > > You are receiving this because you are on the Hidden-Tech Discussion list. > If you would like to change your list preferences, Go to the Members > page on the Hidden Tech Web site. > http://www.hidden-tech.net/members -------------- next part -------------- An HTML attachment was scrubbed... URL: <http://lists.hidden-tech.net/pipermail/hidden-discuss/attachments/20190725/a2d0fd8d/attachment.html>